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    2 months later after Pain attacked Konoha

    2 months after pains attack......

    Fukasaku: Naruto ive taught you everything i know about hermit mode and you have even
    found new levels to them! Now it the rest is up to you...

    Naruto:*shows naruto with a new black and orange robe with jiraiyas headband*
    I understand thank you fuka sensei for training me

    Fukasaku: No problem naruto you were ment for this..well anyway thats what i believe.

    Naruto:...Dont you think its wierd that konoha has not reached us in over 2 months?

    Fukasaku: Yes...indeed..i think its time for you to back and from now on train by your
    self and discover new jutsus like jiraiya did!

    Naruto:*smiles*yeah i will, believe it!

    Ma Frog:allrite here is a good snack to munch on while you go to konoha *hand naruto a bug covered sandwich*

    Naruto:....*O_o makes grosse out face*thanks alot...

    Fukasaku:here ill open up a portal that will send you infront of konoha gate.

    Naruto:alrite*picks up scroll and puts it on his back*

    Naruto:thanks for everything guys i will cya later!*smiles and jumps into the portal*

    *Naruto appears infront of konohas demolished gate*

    Naruto:!?

    Naruto:what the hell happend here?
    *lifts the huge broken door covering the way in*

    *walks inside the village and sees everything demolished and reduced to rubble*

    Naruto:WHAT....HAPPEND!?*runs toward hokage building along the way looking at everything thats destroyed*

    Naruto:NO..IT CANT BE!*makes a horrid face filled with fear and tears*

    *looks at iruka sensei with one of pains swords stuck through his chest*

    Naruto:nooo! Iruka sensei!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!*tears*

    *somebody apears from the shadows watching naruto*

    Naruto:*naruto notices but does not look behind, and makes a angery face*

    ******:....the village....it was attacked....

    *naruto appears behind him with a kunai at his throat*

    Konohamaru:its me naruto konohamaru!

    Naruto:*lowers the kunai*....who....WHO DID THIS!?

    Konohamaru:..it was pain.... he..he...h-

    Naruto:PAIN*MAKES MAD FACE*

    Konohamaru:naruto....he killed iruka sensei...all the anbu...most of the chunnin...and jounin..and he even killed tsunade...and....took kakashi sensei away and also yamato

    Naruto:...!?no..way....what do you mean they took them away?

    Konohamaru:kakashi and yamato were fighting pain together and pain easily beat both of them but i saw him grab his bodys after he was done attacking the village...i dont think he kiled them i think he is just keeping them hostage...

    Naruto:damn it damn it!!!!!!!!WHY DID NOBODY TELL ME!??

    Konhamaru:WE DID !!!! BUT YOU NEVER CAME!EVERBODY THOUGHT YOU WERE COWARING AWAY FROM PAIN!

    Naruto:!?what the hell i was with fukasaku on the mountains nobody informed us...where is sakura chan and shika and others?

    Konahamru:they are alive we tryed fighting back but....it was no use..after pain left the remaining survivers which were mostly shika,sakura,rock lee, kiba,hinata,neji, and others
    went into hiding we had no choice..i came here to get stuff and take back to the lair...

    Naruto:SHIT SHIT SHIT!!*PUNCHES THE GROUND IN ANGER*this is the reason i trained to protect my village and other innocent people! take me to the survivors!!!

    Konahamaru:ok..but they might not be very kind because they think you ran away from konoha...you ran away from pain...

    Naruto:...*both of them disappear*

    Konahamaru:*appears near some mountains*
    were here stay behind me*knocks on the door*

    Naruto:ok...

    *the door opens half way*

    (we hear a voice saying whos there?)

    Konohamaru:it me..open up kiba

    *The doors opens with chouji behind him they see naruto and make a shocked face*

    Chouji:!?

    Kiba:..NARUTO!?

    Konahamaru:...*looks at the ground*

    *sakura comes behind them*

    Sakura:whats all the chatter ab--!*drops the medicine on the ground*

    Chouji:...naruto...WHY WERENT YOU THERE TO SAVE US! AND HELP US!?

    Kiba:...ill tell you why, cause he is a coward!

    Naruto: kiba you dont understand i wa---*kiba charges at naruto*

    Kiba:save it you nothinG BUT A LIAR AND A COWARD!*TRIES TO STAB NARUTO WITH A KUNAI*

    Naruto: *deflects his kunai with his own easily**kiba tries to punch naruto*

    Kiba:i hate YOU!!

    Naruto:....*makes sad face* *grabs kibas fist and gives a hard punch to kiba in the stomach*

    Kiba:*falls to the ground*

    Sakura:*appears behind him with a fist moving rapidly near narutos face* *Naruto does not try to dodge it*

    Naruto:*takes the punch but doesnt move*

    Sakura:!?that punch should have sent you flying...*sakura pulls back her fist*

    Naruto:...i have become stronger...alot stronger...training for the day i would fight pain waiting for you guys to call me.. but nobody ever informed us so we thought everything was okay...but when i came back i saw this....

    Sakura:we called you with a messenger frog! DO YOU KNOW HOW MANY PEOPLE DIED YOU BASTARD!!!!

    Naruto:....well it never showed up*sakura makes a shocked face*

    Sakura:...that bastard...danzo did this... thats what shizune was trying to say...before she died...

    Naruto:*makes a sad face*konoha is destroyed.....all because i wasnt there...

    Sakura:*tears and hugs naruto*i always new that you were alive.....and now theres a new village called konaka..and danzo runs it...he is working with akatsuki...all ..along

    The end of part 1


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    That was awesome, I hope it happens. Seems very interesting :D
     
         

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    cool you're kind of good writer
     
         

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    waiting for part 2 kkkk
     
         

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    wow thats sad....but awsome*2 thumbs up*
     
         

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    Oh yeah reps to you
     
         

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    AAAAA???did sasuke slept all these 2 months???:D

    its interesting though
     
         

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    Quote Originally Posted by TC9tails View Post
    2 months after pains attack......

    Fukasaku: Naruto ive taught you everything i know about hermit mode and you have even
    found new levels to them! Now it the rest is up to you...

    Naruto:*shows naruto with a new black and orange robe with jiraiyas headband*
    I understand thank you fuka sensei for training me

    Fukasaku: No problem naruto you were ment for this..well anyway thats what i believe.

    Naruto:...Dont you think its wierd that konoha has not reached us in over 2 months?

    Fukasaku: Yes...indeed..i think its time for you to back and from now on train by your
    self and discover new jutsus like jiraiya did!

    Naruto:*smiles*yeah i will, believe it!

    Ma Frog:allrite here is a good snack to munch on while you go to konoha *hand naruto a bug covered sandwich*

    Naruto:....*O_o makes grosse out face*thanks alot...

    Fukasaku:here ill open up a portal that will send you infront of konoha gate.

    Naruto:alrite*picks up scroll and puts it on his back*

    Naruto:thanks for everything guys i will cya later!*smiles and jumps into the portal*

    *Naruto appears infront of konohas demolished gate*

    Naruto:!?

    Naruto:what the hell happend here?
    *lifts the huge broken door covering the way in*

    *walks inside the village and sees everything demolished and reduced to rubble*

    Naruto:WHAT....HAPPEND!?*runs toward hokage building along the way looking at everything thats destroyed*

    Naruto:NO..IT CANT BE!*makes a horrid face filled with fear and tears*

    *looks at iruka sensei with one of pains swords stuck through his chest*

    Naruto:nooo! Iruka sensei!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!*tears*

    *somebody apears from the shadows watching naruto*

    Naruto:*naruto notices but does not look behind, and makes a angery face*

    ******:....the village....it was attacked....

    *naruto appears behind him with a kunai at his throat*

    Konohamaru:its me naruto konohamaru!

    Naruto:*lowers the kunai*....who....WHO DID THIS!?

    Konohamaru:..it was pain.... he..he...h-

    Naruto:PAIN*MAKES MAD FACE*

    Konohamaru:naruto....he killed iruka sensei...all the anbu...most of the chunnin...and jounin..and he even killed tsunade...and....took kakashi sensei away and also yamato

    Naruto:...!?no..way....what do you mean they took them away?

    Konohamaru:kakashi and yamato were fighting pain together and pain easily beat both of them but i saw him grab his bodys after he was done attacking the village...i dont think he kiled them i think he is just keeping them hostage...

    Naruto:damn it damn it!!!!!!!!WHY DID NOBODY TELL ME!??

    Konhamaru:WE DID !!!! BUT YOU NEVER CAME!EVERBODY THOUGHT YOU WERE COWARING AWAY FROM PAIN!

    Naruto:!?what the hell i was with fukasaku on the mountains nobody informed us...where is sakura chan and shika and others?

    Konahamru:they are alive we tryed fighting back but....it was no use..after pain left the remaining survivers which were mostly shika,sakura,rock lee, kiba,hinata,neji, and others
    went into hiding we had no choice..i came here to get stuff and take back to the lair...

    Naruto:SHIT SHIT SHIT!!*PUNCHES THE GROUND IN ANGER*this is the reason i trained to protect my village and other innocent people! take me to the survivors!!!

    Konahamaru:ok..but they might not be very kind because they think you ran away from konoha...you ran away from pain...

    Naruto:...*both of them disappear*

    Konahamaru:*appears near some mountains*
    were here stay behind me*knocks on the door*

    Naruto:ok...

    *the door opens half way*

    (we hear a voice saying whos there?)

    Konohamaru:it me..open up kiba

    *The doors opens with chouji behind him they see naruto and make a shocked face*

    Chouji:!?

    Kiba:..NARUTO!?

    Konahamaru:...*looks at the ground*

    *sakura comes behind them*

    Sakura:whats all the chatter ab--!*drops the medicine on the ground*

    Chouji:...naruto...WHY WERENT YOU THERE TO SAVE US! AND HELP US!?

    Kiba:...ill tell you why, cause he is a coward!

    Naruto: kiba you dont understand i wa---*kiba charges at naruto*

    Kiba:save it you nothinG BUT A LIAR AND A COWARD!*TRIES TO STAB NARUTO WITH A KUNAI*

    Naruto: *deflects his kunai with his own easily**kiba tries to punch naruto*

    Kiba:i hate YOU!!

    Naruto:....*makes sad face* *grabs kibas fist and gives a hard punch to kiba in the stomach*

    Kiba:*falls to the ground*

    Sakura:*appears behind him with a fist moving rapidly near narutos face* *Naruto does not try to dodge it*

    Naruto:*takes the punch but doesnt move*

    Sakura:!?that punch should have sent you flying...*sakura pulls back her fist*

    Naruto:...i have become stronger...alot stronger...training for the day i would fight pain waiting for you guys to call me.. but nobody ever informed us so we thought everything was okay...but when i came back i saw this....

    Sakura:we called you with a messenger frog! DO YOU KNOW HOW MANY PEOPLE DIED YOU BASTARD!!!!

    Naruto:....well it never showed up*sakura makes a shocked face*

    Sakura:...that bastard...danzo did this... thats what shizune was trying to say...before she died...

    Naruto:*makes a sad face*konoha is destroyed.....all because i wasnt there...

    Sakura:*tears and hugs naruto*i always new that you were alive.....and now theres a new village called konaka..and danzo runs it...he is working with akatsuki...all ..along

    The end of part 1


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    add some things on sasuke, and its like kishi jr.
     
         

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    great post tc9! as always i look forward to your predicted scripts. how bout a new one everyday lol......
     
         

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    nice

    but fukusaku will not only"open that portal" you told us about...he will go with naruto..thats what he said
     
         

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    aa

    and everyone know how naruto is....and how he thinks.....I don't think that someone from konoha will ever say to him his a coward...
     
         

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    Naruto: Danzo!that bastard.....tsunade warned us about him..

    Sakura: *starts tearing again*tsunade...she tried to save the village by taking on pain alone...she knew...she knew she was no match but........she wanted to fight anyway to protect us and give us time to run away....*makes mad face*she will be avenged.....

    Naruto:she was defeated by pain as well im guessing?

    Sakura:...no...well pain was the one who gave the final blow but she managed to heavly damage another akatsuki and she was female akatsuki...*thinks*i think her name was konan...and then after konan did some move they both ended up on the ground but pain stabbed the sword into her.....I let her die....it was my fault *starts pounding the wall making huge craks and earthquakes*

    Naruto:*grabs sakuras hand before she get pound again*...sakura chan it was not your fault....there was nothing you could have done...they were beyond your level..they are akatsuki...but...ive gotten stronger and i promise you! you will never witness something like that again i will put an end to this...war..i promise....

    Sakura:NARUTO IM SICK OF YOUR PROMISES! WHAT ABOUT THE ONE WHERE YOU WERE SUPPOSED TO BRING BACK SASUKE HUH!? WHAT ABOUT THAT?*SCREAMING*

    Shikamaru:*steps in* stop it sakura...its not his fault...all of us will fufill our promises when the time comes..and i kno for a fact narutos not the type to give up on something

    Naruto:....*sad*im sorry...i will try harder...

    Shikamaru:forget about that rite now, now naruto you are going to explain to us where
    were you during the destruction of konoha *lee and neji, temari, hinata and other step in from the dark*

    *scene changes to akatsuki base*

    Tobi: So he wasnt there?

    Pain: No..he is somewhere i have no data about....but they said he will be back we will hunt him down later...

    Tobi: Indeed...

    Pain: Konan and me destroyed the village so when he comes back to it he should be pissed off and it he will come to us..but anyway were gona extract the 8 tails now where is the body?

    Kisame:*steps in along with zetsu and sasuke* sasuke captured him but a made a mistake and the body turned into a tentacle...

    Pain:!a tentacle...why did you fall for such a simple trick..?*looks at sasuke*

    Sasuke: shut up anybody could have made that mistake!

    Pain:*looks at sasuke with rinnegan and starts walking towards him slowely taking out
    his black sword*....tobi im gona get rid of him he makes to many mistakes, you know we
    can afford those..

    Sasuke:!?*takes out his chidori blade*so you want to fight is that it?*

    Pain:*makes angry face*your starting to get on my nerve*charges at sasuke and raises
    his sword*

    Sasuke:*sees the pains rinnegan and is petrified like kakashi*shit..what is this....*activates mangekyo sharingan and uses amaeratsu*

    Pain:*the ameratsu bounces off pains sheild and goes back at sasuke*

    Sasuke: *Stops the black flame coming towards at him*!?wtf are you?

    Pain: *swings his sword at sasuke*

    *the next thing you see is tobi appearing infront of both of them stopping the sword*

    Tobi:stop it, this is not the time..anyway he recaptured it the body is in the back come on lets extract it

    Pain:*looks at sasuke then turns away, as he walks away he says* I am god you cant kill me with your simple attacks sasuke...

    Sasuke:ill..show you...!*charges at pain but pain quickly turns and kicks sasuke in the stomach*

    Kisame:loser come on your no match for our leader....*walks away*

    Sasuke:is on the ground *the body poofs away*good thing that was a clone...

    *scene changes to raikage*

    Raikage: what the hell they took my brother again and this time its for real! and they destroyed konoha THOSE BASTARDS!!! THIS TIME IM GOING AFTER THEM IM GOING TO TAKE CARE OF THEM ONCE AND FOR ALL!!

    *advisers come in*:you cant leave your village your hokage...

    Raikage:then im not hokage anymore i wont let me brother die....*throws hat off his head and picks up swords and puts them on his back*im leaving...

    *Raikage runs with intense speed out of the front door of the village*

    Raikage: THIS WILL TAKE TO LONG DAMN IT!*summens a dragon*

    Dragon: what is it this time raikage?

    Raikage: its my brother they have takin him....were going to resucue him*hops on dragons back*

    Dragon:*flies off* ohh...ok im sorry to hear that....

    Raikage: go with superspeed this is important!

    Dragon:got it *flaps wings and goes flying and disapears in an instant*

    *Scene changes back to akatsuki base as we see 8 tails being extracted*

    Kisame:this is taking very long...

    Tobi:..yes..since we have fewer members...

    Zetsu: tobi raikage seems to coming towards here...do you want me to take care of him?

    Tobi: no i will and then i will come back and help again *disappears*

    *tobi appears outside the akatsuki layer standing on rocks*

    *something crashes into the ground with intense speed and makes a big boom*

    Dragon:...*gets up*

    Raikage: *jumps out of the dust*

    Raikage:*notices tobi dressed in akatsuki clothes*

    Raikage:you bastard you took my brother! *takes at warhammer from his back*
    Give him BACK!!!!*SMASHESH IT ON THE GROUND AND IT HUGE EARTHQUAKE OCCOURS*

    Tobi:...so your are as strong as they say interesting...

    Raikage: flame him till he dies dragon!

    Dragon: got it!*creates giant flame coming towards tobi*

    Tobi: *deflects it with his hands**apears in front of dragon looks into its eyes*

    Raikage:FLAME HIM AGAIN!

    *DRAGON IGNORES RAIKAGE*

    Raikage: I said flame him! ughhhh w/e jumps in the sky raising hammer over his head and tries to hit tobi*

    Tobi: *looks up* you have a nice dragon its a shame it doesnt obey you anymore...

    Raikage:*turns his head at dragon*NOOO!? *looks at dragons eyes and it has a sharingan*

    Dragon:...sor..sorr...s----*makes even bigger flame and it hits raikage*

    Raikage:!?*raikage goes flying into boulders*

    *Scene changes to Shikamaru and Naruto and others gathered around a table*

    Shikamaru:..wow..you trained with fuka ive only heard legends of that sort of training...

    Naruto:*smiles*yeah....its pertty cool when you say it like that....

    Shikamaru:anyway naruto what will we do now theres no way we can defeat pain!

    Naruto: what? we can ive trained for this im sure i can beat him....

    Sakura:...shikamaru we are going to pain and thats it *slams the table*

    Naruto: No...your not coming im going alone...

    Sakura:!?*looks at naruto*

    Shikamaru:!?

    The end of Part 2!

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    big reps tc9!! your legend continues to grow!!!!

    I WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!! I WANT MORE!! I WANT MORE!! I!!!!!!!!!WANT!!!!!!!!MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:D:mad::D :mad::D:D:D:D:D:D
     
         

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