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    Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Disclaimer: This Fanfic idea is to create a understanding of the past history of the Narutoverse, using factual evidence provided by Kishimmoto and using the addition of fictional characters and information to expand upon the already known tales.


    Chapter 2: Showdown of the Shoguns.


    (we begin our next chapter with a flash back which is the root of the sneak attack on the Mononobe)
    The scene is at a camp where both clans Mononobe and Kusunoki have created to sign a pact after years of unrest and war and we begin with Monochi and Masashige have written on a scroll the list of the clan name and reigning shogun names being themselves and after they signed their name in blood they shake hands confirming the pact.

    Masashige: Well Finally after many years we get to put our differences aside and be brothers

    Monochi: We shall see old Man, only time shall tell but indeed one thing i can agree on is the peace that we shall share between each other

    Zenryoku: Father i shall go see to sister she will be expecting us

    Masashige: Okays Son , i shall follow shortly

    Zenryoku leaves the main tent and walks to the Kusunoki side of the camp to the Shoguns tent and walks in to be confronted by a cold shocking horror, The guards left to protect Akahana were slaughtered with their blood spilled on the ground and splatter stains stretching across the white tent walls as they lay there without any sign of them being aware of the enemy killing them. It was a assassination of a high degree. But in the center of the tent was what shocked him the most there lay his sister defiled and bloody in her own pool of blood seemingly motionless. Just then Masashige is heard laughing outside but soon turns silent as the horror of the event grasps his eyes and he then rushes to his daughters side tears streaming down his face as the loss begins to hit him.

    Masashige: AKAHANA!!!!!!

    Akahane: *in a silent broken voice she whispers in her final breath* Mo..noc..hi.......
    The Disbelief of the name used sends the heart ache into rage

    Masashige: *in a seemingly straight but clearly angry voice he speaks to his son* Zenryoku gather the remaining men we leave at once, i shall have my revenge but i wish to bury my daughter first we shall not allow Monochi to get away with this nor shall we react and show him here as much as i want it Akahana is our main priority.

    Zenryoku Chocking back his anger merely closes his eyes and bows raising his arm to his chest in acknowledgment of the order and turns and leaves the tent giving the order. As this happens behind the back of the tent crouching in silence Kamatari of the Nakatomi clan smirks and whispers silenty to himself

    Kamatari: You will thank me one day Monochi my brother for this alliance with these dogs is a sack of meaningless shit and should of never taken place.

    flashback ends here and we return to the present time of Monochi and Masashige fighting in the village center

    Monochi: You are a blind fool old man your anger blinds you, i had no dealings with your daughters dea.. (cut in by Masashige)

    Masashige: Do not tell me bullshit your lying dog i heard your name in my daughters dying breath i will not here another lie from your poisonous mouth!!

    Masashige thrusts Monochi back gaining an advantage of dealing a attack and jumps up into the air slashing his sword downwards to try cut vertically down the center of Monochi's body

    Masashige: Ground Splitter !!!

    Monochi quickly gains his feet and spinning around to gain momentum and advantage to block the incoming attack pushing masashige to the ground on his right hand side as Zenryoku and Keoto and the remaining elite guard watch on as they fight.

    Monochi: Seems like you do not wish to listen to my side of the story, it is unfortunate that your daughter died however i shall not ignore the fact you break our treaty and use a cowardly sneak attack on my village and for that old man i shall dig your grave here and display your hear on my banner!!

    Masashige rises to his feet roaring with anger as he attempts another downwards thrusting strike to Monochi in an attempt to kill him with the a strong thrusting slash

    Masashige: Heavenly Divide !

    but yet again the attack is simply blocked and braking Masashige's guard leaving him open for Monochi to counter as he smirks at the old mans weakness that he is providing to Monochi

    Monochi:I shall end this now old man prepare to DIE!!!!! .... HORIZONTAL FRACTURE

    he deals a horizontal slash to masashige's gut with splits him wide open spilling his intestings and stomache out of his body as he collapses to his Knees and masashige grasps for air and watches as his life is drained from him and he sees Monochi spin around as he smiles

    Monochi: Beheading reverse Slash!!
    Monochi with his final attack removes Masashige's head clean off his shoulders spraying blood over his face and the ground , and Zenryoku watches with anger and cuts through his opponent Keoto but only wounding him in the shoulder and then swiftly butchers several elite guards in his way to Monochi but is suddenly thwarted as he meets resistance from Iwaaka and Luiz holding him back

    Iwaaka: Stop Zenryoku-sama there is nothing we can do now our element of surprise has disapated we must retreat

    Luiz: Iwaaka is correct because of your fathers death you have now taken his ruling you are the Shogun now we must retreat and prepare for battle to avenge the loss of Late Masashige Shogun sama and we cannot lose you to.

    Zenryoku Snapping in agreement

    Zenryoku: Fine, sound the retreat, MONOCHI!!! i shall see your blood and your Kin's blood spilled on the battlefields of the great northern passage that lays between out lands there you shall die mark my words my fathers death and Akahana's shall be avenged

    Monochi: Hahahaha run like dogs and cling to your meaningless life Zenryoku for soon you shall be granted your wish that you so desire , To See your Father and Sister in the afterlife.

    Zenryoku and the remaining Kusunoki clan retreat out the main gate running back to the darkness of the night as he sends Iwaaka and Luiz out to collect the other clans who's alliance to the Kusunoki is strong and true and to request their aide in battle which will surely come when they here of the actions of Monochi. and thus we now return to Monochi back in the Village as he gives orders

    Monochi: Set up a defensive perimeter of the village have the civilians help the wounded and collect our dead and send messengers to my brother Kamatari Nakatomi and Musashi Miyamoto tell them to come aide in our battle to be with the dogs Kusunoki clan.

    Guard: Sir as you command it shall be done

    Somewhere not far off from the soon to be battlefield the hooded man walks out the dark forest onto a ridge that overlooks a vast plain as the sun rises red clearly indicating that blood has been spilled during the night.

    ????: I hope i make it in time.....

    Who is this hooded person ? ... we shall find out soon

    Next chapter: No time for mourning, Preparations precede



    Written by The Pervy Sage and Zenryoku
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Finally we have our second chapter out :D
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    lol, okays son. All it basically was in this one was seeing death . But nonetheless, it was a good read.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Bring on Chp. 3 this was very nice....epic even
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Imma lovin' it, nice work again.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    very graphic
    i like it alot :D great job
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by Zenryoku View Post
    Finally we have our second chapter out :D
    3rd within the next week hopefully

    Quote Originally Posted by Sasuke Uchiha.. View Post
    lol, okays son. All it basically was in this one was seeing death . But nonetheless, it was a good read.
    Got to have a good storyline built up first

    Quote Originally Posted by Zanji Uchiha View Post
    Bring on Chp. 3 this was very nice....epic even
    Thank zen for his great writing skills

    Quote Originally Posted by Joker. View Post
    Imma lovin' it, nice work again.
    Thanks
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    just cool
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Brutal =|. Awesome. But Brutal.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Another awesome Chap
    really like it
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    great chapter ^_^
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    thankyou people ^_^
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    You guys are fast O__O

    One every week? Awesome :D

    Great chapter guys ^^
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by Izuna Uchiha View Post
    You guys are fast O__O

    One every week? Awesome :D

    Great chapter guys ^^
    Ikr that's what i said

    lol love the story seriously great chapter >.> waiting for Chapter 3 ^_^
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Very nice this time around too. You added plot twists, which I love to add in my own! :D

    Great work again!
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by Izuna Uchiha View Post
    You guys are fast O__O

    One every week? Awesome :D

    Great chapter guys ^^
    One a week is what we are hoping for, and thanks man

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Crow~ View Post
    Ikr that's what i said

    lol love the story seriously great chapter >.> waiting for Chapter 3 ^_^
    Wait about a week then And thanks

    Quote Originally Posted by GaaraRules111 View Post
    Very nice this time around too. You added plot twists, which I love to add in my own! :D

    Great work again!
    Thanks man
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Thanks people for your comments keep them coming and i shall be releasing the new chapter thats already done on wednesday :D
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    I have to say I like your style. Keeping the chapters short and sweet keeps the readers interest and leaves them wanting more. It also allows you to to release more chapters in a shorter amouont of time, which satifies people's "thirst". good job guys. I cant wait to read more.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Oooh, politics. Interesting flashback. Expands upon the situation, showing us that the attack on the camp had a more profound reason, rather than territory or "I just don't like you."

    Almost missed this chapter. It was another good one - I look forward to Wednesday, then.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    nice job
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    nice chap....waiting for the 3rd chapterwease:
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by Akiza View Post
    nice job
    Thanks sensei

    Quote Originally Posted by Igneel View Post
    nice chap....waiting for the 3rd chapterwease:
    It shall be released tomorrow at some point and thanks
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Big props Zenryoku and Pervy. very nice story line you have, cant wait for chapter 3. tomorrow right?
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    It is graphic, but in a good way. It's not senseless killing, but killing with more of a purpose.
     
         

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    Re: Naruto, The Untold Story Chapter 2.

    Quote Originally Posted by Crutch Kaguya View Post
    It is graphic, but in a good way. It's not senseless killing, but killing with more of a purpose.
    well i guess you could consider it a adult graphic novel style, yes this is a family site but yeh it be boring if they all held hands and picking daisies this way is much better xD action all the way
     
         

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