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    Towards Finality Ch.6

    Yo.
    Sixth chapter is finished.
    Here are the previous five:

    Chapter 1
    Chapter 2
    Chapter 3
    Chapter 4
    Chapter 5

    Notes before reading: Back in the 4th chapter, something odd had happened. We see that Sakura has died, in the midst of Naruto and Sasuke's battle. You can say that her blood in on their hands. Sasuke cruelly taunts Naruto, and Naruto is angered, and lunges to punch Sasuke. But at the last minute, Naruto refuses to hit him. Then all of a sudden, there was a white flash, and we know that Naruto's fainted...but what happened to Sasuke? This chapter is written in his view. Again, it's a bit shorter than usual...


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    Chapter 6: Retreat from Reality


    A gentle breeze brushed against his dark hair, as bright rays of sunshine pressed warmly upon his face.
    Wait, warm…?
    Sasuke Uchiha opened his eyes, only to find a clear, bright blue sky looming far above him.
    That’s not right, He thought. Just moments ago the day had been darkening, and the wind had been treacherously summoning up a storm. He sat up, only to find that he had been lying in a soft, grassy field.
    Memories instantly plagued his mind.
    …Naruto was running towards him with his rasengan…
    …Sakura leaped in between them with her arms flung wide open…
    And then she had died…
    He closed his eyes, trying to clear his muddled thoughts. Then he remembered.
    Everything had just dissolved…He recalled, opening his eyes. He stood up, and looked around. A paved road was not too far ahead, and seemed to lead to a collection of tall buildings. He stepped onto the road, and strolled through the street. Sasuke stared at the buildings.
    This is…Konoha? He recognised. Except, Konoha would never have been this empty. The only place in Konoha that was void of any people was the Uchiha complex.
    It was odd. Moments ago, he had felt…stressed. And exhausted. With his battle against Naruto, and Sakura’s sudden appearance and death, his mind was in a mess.
    Yet here, he felt calm, and at peace. Strange. It was as though he was a world away from the moments he had only just been experiencing mere seconds ago.
    Genjutsu, He thought immediately. Could Naruto have casted it?
    Impossible. He had never known Naruto to ever use genjutsu. And even if he ever did, there was no way the idiot could be capable enough to have produced an illusion with such exact detail and feeling. Sasuke only knew one person who was capable of that, but that person was already dead.
    Then who…?
    Maybe it wasn’t a genjutsu. There had been no one else around in the area to cast it. He was sure of that.
    Doubt filled his mind.
    “No. This is a genjutsu casted by Naruto.” Sasuke said quietly aloud to convince himself. He had to decide what was going on quickly, so that he could begin thinking of a way out. Naruto casting a genjutsu seemed to be the only plausible explanation for his situation.
    “Well, you’re partly right.”
    Sasuke spun around at the sound of the voice, and swiftly drew his sword. His eyes widened at the oncoming figure. Cold fear began to sweep through his body, and coursed through his veins.
    “No…y-you’re dead…you died!!” He pointed a shaking finger at the person. Suddenly, memories flashed through his mind’s eye, of a certain figure lying cold and dead on the ground; his eyes were lifeless, his face dirty, his arm burnt. Dried blood decorated his lower face.
    Sasuke focused back on the approaching figure, who had now stopped to stand across from him. He could feel his heart thumping wildly in his chest.
    There, stood the very man Sasuke had spent half of his own life swearing to kill.
    There, stood Uchiha Itachi.

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    Chapter 7: http://www.narutobase.net/forums/sho...d.php?t=105605
    And?
    I understand that I have made Itachi in two different places at the same time in this story. I don't see it as an error...the Edo-Itachi isn't aware of this. Explanation of what is going on will happen in future chapters. You can already guess, I'm working on Itachi's gift here. Bear in mind, I started this fic before the chapter about Koto Amatsukami came out. I had already envisioned this, so, I'm sticking with it. So let's pretend K.A didn't exist. (For now).
    Again, sorry for the short chapter. >__> "
     
         
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    Re: Towards Finality Ch.6

    Dude your Fan-Fics Are Fucking Epic.
     
         

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    Re: Towards Finality Ch.6

    Excellent as usual. The whole Sasuke hallucination/genjutsu affect is great. We have Naruto simply pass out (like in how they did in their first fight) and now we see what Sasuke goes through.

    Although as for the explination of why Itachi is there in Sasuke's mind, I think KA would be a fantastic explination of how that is possible. The genjutsu casted by Shisui's eye and Sasuke under the illusion, he has a talk with Itachi just like how Minato and Kushina managed to talk to Naruto. However that was just a thought. Before you gave that little note at the end saying that you didn't use KA was a little surprising and I was confused a little as to how Itachi would be able to project himself in that way, seeing as the Edo summoned Itachi is infact the soul of Itachi. However, like you said I'm sure you have an explination for all of this and I really like these two chapters. Idk what it is about your fourth chapter that I just like more.

    Your fourth chapter just must have been the topper for me or the climax maybe. All your chapters are well articulated, well written, and you're plot line is very well thought out. When I read this it makes me feel like this stuff may actually happen in the series. Although there are things you've had happend that haven't happened in the manga everything seems completly possible and you make it convincing. I gave this thread 5 stars and thanked your post. Very nice job my friend.
     
         

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    Re: Towards Finality Ch.6

    Quote Originally Posted by iMadara View Post
    Dude your Fan-Fics Are Fucking Epic.
    Whoa, thanks.

    Quote Originally Posted by Reborn View Post
    Although as for the explination of why Itachi is there in Sasuke's mind, I think KA would be a fantastic explination of how that is possible. The genjutsu casted by Shisui's eye and Sasuke under the illusion, he has a talk with Itachi just like how Minato and Kushina managed to talk to Naruto. However that was just a thought. Before you gave that little note at the end saying that you didn't use KA was a little surprising and I was confused a little as to how Itachi would be able to project himself in that way, seeing as the Edo summoned Itachi is infact the soul of Itachi.
    Now, I'm in doubt. >__> "
    Maybe I should put a spoiler...:
    Minato and Kushina had sealed some of thier chakras into Naruto, I think, hoping that they could see him one day. In the same way, I was thinking Itachi had put some of his chakra into the crow. Minato was able to restrain the Kyuubi (I think?) and go elsewhere to talk with Naruto, so I assumed, that that specific form of Itachi would be capable of casting the genjutsu himself...I saw no need for KA. Or @ least, I'm unsure, how I would explain how it would be used in this situation...
    But using KA would kind of save me. I won't have to attempt solving Shisui's eyeball mystery.


    Well, my 4th chapter represents everyone at the peak of their emotions. So I can understand why that chapter may have been better/best. The 5th was a skim of the war, and this one was more of a "what's going on?" chapter.
    Oh, and my 4th was the longest, funnily enough.
     
         

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    Re: Towards Finality Ch.6

    Quote Originally Posted by Train View Post
    Whoa, thanks.



    Now, I'm in doubt. >__> "
    Maybe I should put a spoiler...:
    Minato and Kushina had sealed some of thier chakras into Naruto, I think, hoping that they could see him one day. In the same way, I was thinking Itachi had put some of his chakra into the crow. Minato was able to restrain the Kyuubi (I think?) and go elsewhere to talk with Naruto, so I assumed, that that specific form of Itachi would be capable of casting the genjutsu himself...I saw no need for KA. Or @ least, I'm unsure, how I would explain how it would be used in this situation...
    But using KA would kind of save me. I won't have to attempt solving Shisui's eyeball mystery.


    Well, my 4th chapter represents everyone at the peak of their emotions. So I can understand why that chapter may have been better/best. The 5th was a skim of the war, and this one was more of a "what's going on?" chapter.
    Oh, and my 4th was the longest, funnily enough.
    Genius I never thought that it could happen like that but, again you keep surprising me with the realistic (to the original series) possibilities. Also, not that I think about KA wouldn't actually be all that good in this situation seeing as it takes control of the user's mind, not actually giving them such an oppritunity like how you said Itachi appeard. KA is more of a hidden battle tactic and what you just explained does have a stronger sense of possibility then the affect of KA, so yeah. Still great job.
     
         

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    Re: Towards Finality Ch.6

    train u r just awesome pal
     
         

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    Re: Towards Finality Ch.6

    Quote Originally Posted by naruto kyuubi View Post
    train u r just awesome pal
    Really?! >__< Thank you !

    Quote Originally Posted by Reborn View Post
    Genius I never thought that it could happen like that but, again you keep surprising me with the realistic (to the original series) possibilities. Also, not that I think about KA wouldn't actually be all that good in this situation seeing as it takes control of the user's mind, not actually giving them such an oppritunity like how you said Itachi appeard. KA is more of a hidden battle tactic and what you just explained does have a stronger sense of possibility then the affect of KA, so yeah. Still great job.
    The thing is, in the manga, Itachi's plan failed, and he's left Sasuke to Naruto now. So, although I've started this genjutsu thing, I'm still going to have to somehow give Naruto all the credit...well, his actions were what activated it to begin with, if you think about what just happened, and on what terms Itachi gave the crow to Naruto.
    Also, in the manga, we realize that, Itachi is capable of forcing Sasuke against his will (although, saving his life and rep in the process) for Konoha. What I'm doing so far, is nothing like that...I feel like I don't have Itachi's mindset/character right then.
    Plus, before that manga-chapter had come out, we all [I did, anyway] coldly assumed Itachi had actually killed Shisui...now we know that he was just...aiding Shisui in killing himself? By the path I'm going, it doesn't look like I can reveal that...or @ least, re-explaining will be an issue.
    And then, there's the missing eyeball.
    So, not using KA does have disadvantages.
     
         

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