Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦
Originally Posted by Scorps
Kougu no Pangu | Tools of the Creator
Using basic chakra shape manipulation, the user is capable of making small, simple and "solid" chakra constructs like cubes, spheres, kunais, pillars, etc. These are manifested and visible in a light blue color, although remaining quite transparent.
Note: Can only be taught by Scorps or Zenryoku
Note2: Constructs are created within short range of the user
Note3: Can only be used once per turn, up to 6 times.
(I was unsure if i could resubmitt this and worked out the description, since what i meant to say is that the basic principle behind the Rasengan is Shape Manipulation)
~Declined~ 3 things; follow proper template for the rank, limit it to 4 usages, and add a note that chakra tools are weaker then other elements which received chakra manipulation (Chakra manipulate < chakra manipulation + elemental manipulation)(this is to avoid confusion with less experienced members).
Hlín No Te | Hlín's Hand
Using basic chakra shape manipulation, the user coats his palm with pure chakra and expands it forming a thin circular construct in front of it that can be directed and used to defend against offensive jutsu. The construct is light blue in color but remains quite transparent. Once per battle the user can channel enough chakra into it to defend against 1 S-Rank jutsu but, if so, he can't use it again for the rest of the match.
Note: Can only be taught by Scorps
Note2: Can only be used once per turn to a maximum of 4 times
Note3: Can defend against 1 S-Rank, once per match but can't be used again and the user can't use Non-Elemental Ninjutsu in the following turn
Added the bolded parts. If you feel they can be better in some way, please be free to edit
~Declined~ Please elaborate on this shield. When you don't infuse it to defend S-rank jutsus, is it still there and able to defend lower techniques? Again add the note I recommended in the jutsu above.
Genjutsu: Akuma Houyou | Ilussionary Arts: Demon Hug
Range: Short to Mid
Chakra: 30 (+10 next turn to keep active)
Damage: 60 (at the end of the 2 turns)
The user makes 3 simple hand seals (Boar+Serpent+Rat) and makes the enemy feel as if he's being tightly squeezed; as if pressure is being applied to every point of his body, rendering him restraint and unable to move. The pressure on the enemy's body is so great that if he doesn't dispel the illusion in 2 turns he'll have trouble breathing and will eventually faint. To maintain the illusion, the user has to keep the Rat hand seal performed and stay still on the same place.
Note: Can only be used twice
Note2: Has to be taught by Scorps
Note3: Can't use Genjutsu in the same turn or the next
Note4: While keeping the illusion activated, user can't perform any jutsu except via clones
Note5: In the 2nd turn its active, it counts as a users move, so only 2 other jutsu can be performed in that turn
Changed the name (this was the Pressure genjutsu in the previous submission), lowered the rank as it was not exactly as powerfull as any S-Rank gen seen so far, uped the resctritions and bettered the description.
~Declined~ please explain how a genjutsu could cause physical problems? I understand he'll undergo some "mental" pain, but the only way he could faint is by being mentally shattered (same as Kakashi when facing Itachi's Tsukuyomi). You can still cause your opponent to faint, but change the description as to how he gets there.
Doton/Fuuton: Semai Meimei Oberisuku | Earth/Wind Release: Small Divine Obelisk
Range: Short-Long (on throwing)
Chakra: 30 (-10 each turn)
User does 3 hand seals (Dog+Ox+Bird) and 1 Rock Obelisk breaks from the ground within short range of the user. This obelisk is about 4 meters high and 2 meters wide. This Obelisk is then infused with wind chakra which makes it rise from the ground and hover above ground between short to mid range around the user. The user can direct the obelisk to defend against up to S-Rank Lightning and Water, A-Rank Earth, Wind, Fire. When the Obelisk is hit by Fire above B-Rank, the rock turns into lava from the combined heat of the Wind and the Fire, but the jutsu will still be stopped. The Obelisk can also be used to attack the enemy, by throwing it against the enemy.
Note: can only be used 3 times
Note2: stays active maximum of 3 turns
Note3: can only be taught by Scorps
Made a simpler version with only one obelisk and kept the basic idea. Tweaked the description in both grammar and description. Changed the restrictions and lowered the rank to A-Rank. Also changed the range of the trowing to long. When i get the rank i'll submit the S-Rank version with the basic idea but two obelisks. If this one gets approved that is ^^
~Approved~ my bad ^^