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    A Pokemon Adventure Chapter 9

    Chapter 9


    Adam wins his first badge & Old friends

    Adam: Mienfoo I know you are tired but I know you can do this. Mienfoo use force palm.

    Yasmine: Tyrant doge and use brick break

    Adam: Mienfoo doge and use dig and follow with ancient power from under ground

    Narrator: Mienfoo made a direct hit but not to effective.

    Yasmine: you can stand Tyrant.

    Narrator: Tyrant stood up

    Yasmine: Tyrant use earthquake

    Narrator: Tyrant also got a direct hit in

    Adam: you can do this Mienfoo

    Narrator: Mienfoo stood up

    Adam: Mienfoo use drain punch

    Aurora: Tyrant is tired go Adam

    Yasmine: Tyrant use headbutt

    Adam: Mienfoo dodge it

    Narrator: Tyrant's attack missed

    Adam: Mienfoo use jump kick

    Narrator: it was a direct hit though it was not very effective.

    Yasmine: Tyrant get up.

    Karen: Tyrant is unable to battle, the winner is Adam from Tasmoto Town.

    Yasmine: you did well Adam I now present you with the Storm Rock Badge.

    Adam: I NOW HAVE MY FIRST BADGE!

    Aurora & Byran: congrats Adam

    Amelia & Ivan congrats Adam

    Adam: thanks guys

    Yasmine: well now is as a good time as any to have lunch.

    Aurora: we will return in two hours then.

    Yasmine: okay seeya soon.

    Byran: so where should we go for lunch.

    Amelia: there is a place. Me and Ivan wanted to go to to see what it is like you can come if you want.

    Aurora: sounds good we had no plans right guys.

    Byran & Adam: nope

    Aurora: then its decided lead the way Amelia.

    Narrator: they arrive at there destination.

    Amelia: here we are.

    Aurora: look like a nice place

    Amelia: I agree, shall we go in

    Aurora: yes

    Narrator: they all went inside.

    Amelia: mum recommended this place before I left she said she came here on her journey.

    Aurora: I see so are you doing the same path your mum went on her journey.

    Amelia no I am just going to places she recommended if I end up in any towns she went to.

    Aurora: cool Idea you have there.

    Narrator: half an hour or so later they had all finish having lunch.

    Amelia well I am going to kill some more time looking around here before my battle, what are you going to do Aurora.

    Aurora: I think I will join you what you going to do Adam and Byran.

    Adam: I think I will head back to the poke centre and give my pokemon to nurse joy then after I have done a few things there I may call mum.

    Byran I may go look for things we need to stock up on for when we leave.

    Ivan: Amelia I will catch you later I will let you spend time with your friend.

    Amelia: thanks Ivan lets go Aurora.

    Aurora: have fun Adam and Byran I will catch up with you later at the pokemon centre.

    Narrator: they then went there seperate ways for now.

    Adam: I thought it would be a good idea to talk about where we want to go next Byran.

    Byran: well there is a contest in Rosetta town in about a week

    Adam: sounds like a plan, well I guess I will head back to the pokemon centre what about you.

    Byran: I have a few more things to do here.

    Adam: okay I will head back to the pokemon centre.

    Narrator: about ten or so minutes later adam got to the pokemon centre and he decided to ring home.

    So meanwhile back in Tasmoto town

    “ring ring”

    Anthea: can you get that Natsume

    Natsume: sure mum

    Adam: hey Natsume

    Natsume: hey mum its Adam, hey Adam how has you day been so far today.

    Adam: it was tough day but awesome, I won my first badge.

    Narrator: Adam then shows Natsume the badge.

    Natsume: Congrats Adam I knew you could do it who was the gym leader.

    Adam: her name was Yasmine she has light brown hair and hazel eyes

    Natsume: I think I travel with her for a bit on my journey, was a girl named Karen there.

    Adam: yeah she was the ref.

    Natume: hey can you see her for me before you guys leave and see if she can contact me.

    Adam sure Natsume, so where is everyone.

    Anthea: sorry Adam was just getting things ready

    Adam: no worries mum, see mum I won my first badge

    Anthea: congrats Adam.

    Adam: Where is dad and Ethan.

    Anthea: feeding the baby pokemon, oh thats right dad has a pokemon egg for you both to raise, actually where is Aurora strange she is not there with you.

    Adam: she is with Amelia

    Natsume: Amelia that girl that had to move away just before I went on my journey.

    Adam: yeah I think so

    Natsume: on your journey you never know who you will meet.

    Adam: thats true, well say hi to Ethan and dad for me mum and Natsume I think Aurora may call you later I may do a bit of training before dinner.

    Anthea & Natsume: we will do that seeya you later Adam.

    Narrator: he then went to see nurse joy.

    Adam: nurse joy

    Nurse Joy: yes your pokemon are all fit andd healthy.

    Adam: come on out every one, it thank to you all that I got this so thank you.

    Chimchar: Chimchar

    Staravia: Staravia

    Mienfoo: Mienfoo

    Narrator: about thirty or so minutes later.

    Byran: hey Adam

    Adam: hey Byran where is everyone.

    Byran: they should be back soon.

    Adam: hey want to start on dinner they should be back by the time we are done.

    Byran: good Idea.

    Adam: so did you get everything you needed.

    Byran: yeah

    Narrator: another hour or so later.

    Aurora: well I may call home want to come say hi Amelia.

    Amelia: sure.

    Adam: oh no you dont dinner is ready your all back just in time.

    Aurora: okay I guess after tea it is then.

    Adam: we made enough for everyone.

    Narrator: they then all sat down for dinner.

    Adam: so how did your Gym battles go.

    Ivan: good

    Amelia: I only just won I found it hard just like you adam.

    Adam: I see congrats.to you both.

    Byran: yeah congrats.

    Aurora: well I am going to call home then go to bed coming Amelia, oh thanks for dinner Byran and Adam.

    Amelia: yeah thank you both and sure Aurora, and I was thinking we could battle sometime tomorrow.

    Aurora: sure I like that idea.

    Ivan: thanks you two for dinner, I may go see nurse joy then go to bed

    Amelia: I should to I will be with you soon Aurora.

    Adam & byran no problem at all everyone.

    Byran: well that was a good day.

    Adam: yes it was and thanks for the help Byran I am off to bed see you in the morning.

    Byran: night Adam.

    Adam: night Byran.

    Narrator: Aurora called home while Adam, Byran & Ivan went up to bed, Aurora talked to them for half an hour with Amelia then they both went to bed.

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    Re: A Pokemon Adventure Chapter 9

    Hey Serena, I would like to start off first by saying that I saw the Narrator parts in your story and in my opinion, I think it would visually look better if you removed the Narrator and just have the sentence or paragraph written out as usual. I used to do that myself and was told by Mikey I believe and I listened and my story just looked much more better that way. Ultimately your decision

    Okay I was behind three chapters, so I’m going to give my three reviews in one post. I like that the group of travelers have grown. It’s interesting to find out that Ivan does both gym battles and contests. Vulpix is one of my top favorite Pokemon so it’s cool that Ivan has one It’s great to see Pokemon from the sixth generation ^^ Finally we take on the gym. The type disadvantages and Adam’s determination throughout it was great. It was nice to see how the group spent more time together and continued learning more about each other.

    Keep it up
     
         

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    Re: A Pokemon Adventure Chapter 9

    Quote Originally Posted by Kuroi Honoo View Post
    Hey Serena, I would like to start off first by saying that I saw the Narrator parts in your story and in my opinion, I think it would visually look better if you removed the Narrator and just have the sentence or paragraph written out as usual. I used to do that myself and was told by Mikey I believe and I listened and my story just looked much more better that way. Ultimately your decision

    Okay I was behind three chapters, so I’m going to give my three reviews in one post. I like that the group of travelers have grown. It’s interesting to find out that Ivan does both gym battles and contests. Vulpix is one of my top favorite Pokemon so it’s cool that Ivan has one It’s great to see Pokemon from the sixth generation ^^ Finally we take on the gym. The type disadvantages and Adam’s determination throughout it was great. It was nice to see how the group spent more time together and continued learning more about each other.

    Keep it up
    thanks for the tip i will keep that in mind and once again i am glad you enjoyed it also i released all chapters at the same time
     
         

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    Re: A Pokemon Adventure Chapter 9

    Quote Originally Posted by Sophie Ezra View Post
    thanks for the tip i will keep that in mind and once again i am glad you enjoyed it also i released all chapters at the same time
    You’re welcome and I’m glad that you took it into consideration Yeah, you pulled a Mikey(Michael92) release lol I don’t think I could so bold as to do that so kudos to you for doing it! ^^
     
         

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